Tuesday, June 22, 2010

CKK 14 Results



Caribbean Kigo #14 Kukai Results

Players:1.Devika Jyothi, India; 2.Nakamura Sakuon, Japan; 3.Tatjana Debeljacki, Serbia.; 4.Cara Holman, USA; 5.Keith A. Simmonds, T & T; 6.Jacek Margolak; 7.John MacDonald, Scotland; 8.Quentin Clingerman, MD, USA; 9.Ralf Bröker, Germany; 10.Ian Tuttle; San Francisco, CA, USA; 11.Bill Kenney, USA; 12.Reason A. Poteet, USA, IN; 13.Franklin Magalhaes, Rio de Janeiro, Brazil; 14.Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland; 15.Melissa Allen, Madison, Wisconsin, USA; 16.Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 17. Mary Davila, USA; 18.Catherine J.S. Lee, Maine, USA; 19.Cezar-Florian Ciobîca, Romania; 20.Magdalena Dale; 21.Vasile Moldovan, Romania

#13 FIRST PLACE

My father's face
forty years later
back in my mirror
--Franklin Magalhaes
Votes:55***1 Points: 21
Comment:1. So true: we become our parents.
Comment:2. Like how it tells about the way we become more like our parents with age. And the memories it brings


#11 SECOND PLACE

autumn memory
of those walks with my father . . .
so many silences
--BILL KENNEY
Votes:423*** Points: 17
Comments:Autumn has been chosen as the season to link with memory and also the silent zones in communication between generations


#16 #17 THIRD PLACE
16
father planting
new violets
on his son's grave
--Tikkis
Votes:431*** Points: 13
Comments:The image speaks for itself, and the poet stays out of the way.


17
Father’s Day . . .
I try to remember
his voice
--Mary Davila
Votes:322*** Points: 13
Comment 1:Touches on loss and remembrance so eloquently.
Comment 2:The pathos of memory.


RESULTS CONTINUED

1
car takes the gravel road-
cradled in my lap
father’s funerary urn
--devika
Votes:*2**** Points: 4
Comments:Line 2 is strong, but line 1 doesn't need the first three words, "funerary urn" is a mouthful ("ashes" would do), and the word order of lines 2-3 is forced for false emphasis (line 2 would make a great line 3).


2
the smell of tobacco
reminds me
father’s big hug
--Sakuo
Votes:3***** Points: 3
Comments:A Proustian moment. Might have more emotional kick if line 3 were line 1, but you could argue either way, and there's more to poetry than emotional kicks..


3
Fathers birthday
Daughter sketchers him under the tree
He leaned his hat.
--Tatjana
Votes:****** Points:
Comments:


4
my father’s orchard—
tending his fruit trees
reaping the harvest
--Cara Holman
Votes:3****** Points: 3
Comments:Novelistic density in a haiku. The shift from "his" (line 2) to "the" (line 3) is masterly.


5
a father thinking
about his only son ...
Irak war
--Keith A. SIMMONDS
Votes:31**** Points: 5
Comments:


6
Father's Day-
smoother than ever
his cheeks
--Jacek Margolak; POLAND
Votes:211*** Points: 7
Comments:


7
dozing
in my father's hat:
source of dreams
--John MacDonald
Votes:211*** Points:7
Comments:


8
Dad you did your best
May you rest in that knowledge
From Son who now knows
--Que
Votes:*1**** Points: 2
Comments:


9
father’s birthday
I pick up Mum
for mass
--Ralf
Votes:22***** Points: 6
Comments:A way of life--of at least three lives, in fact--caught with absolute economy.


10
Your Mickey Mouse watch,
Itself your best lesson:
Time is the currency of life.
--Ian Tuttle; San Francisco, CA, USA
Votes:****** Points:
Comments:


12
one eye on the clock
the dead bolt sounds dad's alarm
curfew
--Reason A. Poteet, USA, IN
Votes:1***** Points: 1
Comments:


14
father's day -
tears in the boy's eyes
from the orphanage
--Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland
Votes:42**** Points:8
Comments:


15
my father’s car
part of
my inheritance
-- Melissa Allen
Votes:****** Points:
Comments:


18
that empty chair
at this year's celebration --
Father's Day
--Catherine J.S. Lee, Maine, USA
Votes:2*1*** Points: 5
Comments:Absence becomes more prominent during celebration. The way his predominance is maintained, signified by the empty chair, even in his absence.


19
first shaving -
the old blazor reminds me
of my dad
--Cezar-Florian Ciobîca, Romania
Votes:****** Points:
Comments:


20
After his death
the dust on my dad’s hat…
ice moon
--Magdalena Dale
Votes:5*1*** Points: 8
Comments 1: L1 not necessary needed?
the dust
on my dad's hat ...
ice moon
Comments 2:I'm not sure about the jux, but I can see the dust.


21
Alway an empty chair
at the head of the table-
my father's
--Vasile Moldovan, Romania
Votes:3***** Points: 3
Comments:First word, always, not needed?



LATE ENTRY received while voting was in process
faded photo
getting to meet father
for the first time
--Warren Gossett; USA

quick link to past winners way back to kukai #1

Tuesday, June 1, 2010

CKK #14


hat rack image from...

Caribbean Kigo Kukai # 14

Dear haiku friends you are invited to participate in The Caribbean Kigo fourteenth Kukai

The theme is fathers

Send one haiku which incorporates this theme e-mail to

Example:-
the hat rack
the house where i grew up
only dad's hat
--gillena cox

During the month of June many countries all over the globe celebrate in some special way fathers

...Historians have recorded that there was a tradition to celebrate Father's Day even thousands of years ago. Their study say that 4,000 years ago in Babylon a son called Elmesu carved a father's day message on a clay card. In his message Elmesu wished his father a long and healthy life. There is no knowledge as to what happened to this father son duo but it is believed that several countries retained the custom of celebrating Father's Day...more


Deadline for sending entries is June 10th 2010
Deadline for sending votes is June 20th 2010

A voting list will be e-mailed to all players

Voting: Votes to be scored using a total of 6pts
Example:-
Haiku#76………3pts
Haiku#34………2pts
Haiku#8………1pt

Comments during voting are encouraged but must be limited to 3 lines; when published these comments and the votes will be given anonymous listings.
Ballots(votes and comments)to be sent e-mail to

The results will be published here at Caribbean Kigo Kukai

After results have been posted, any comments you wish to make can be posted directly just click on comments at the end of the post

much love
gillena